My First Narrative, “No Parking”

No Parking from Jack Taylor on Vimeo.

Hey Gang,

So this is the first narrative film my friend David Carrillo and I made in Danny’s intro to video production class.

Believe it or not, this thing is supposed to be a comedy. It is the story of a for-hire driver (Hueston Houston) who longs to be a MUNI bus operator, and we decided that the three acts were going to be 1, Introduce Hueston as a depressed character who aspires to obtain his dream job of being a bus driver. 2, show Huston being verbally abused by his clients/ people he meets on the streets, and 3, having Hueston get his car towed on account after parking in a No Parking zone.

For me, the narration should sound more confident, and have a more obvious comedic tone. I feel as though a lot of our comedic ideas weren’t able to be fully realized because of our lack of experience with Final Cut. The sound is off on many instances, and the transitions from scene to scene seem to take away from the comedic timing.

That isn’t to say that none of the humor worked, I feel like the montage of Hueston’s (my character’s) obsessive MUNI activities works well.

What I do think works is our cinematography. I attribute most, if not all, of the cinematographic accolades to David. Due to our schedules, we were forced to shoot at night. To compensate we had to aim flashlights, bought at office max, at the actors to light each scene. Despite the quickly put together lighting setup, I feel the movie came out looking pretty good for our first try. Especially the scene where Hueston is smoking outside of a downtown building. I also think we did a good job filming at diverse locations throughout SF, leading to a broader scope for the movie.

Ultimately, the movie seems rushed to me, which was a result of our lack of experience. I still think that the premise for the movie is a funny one, but the execution fell short. To a good number of people who saw it, the character of Hueston came across as a tragic character rather than a comedic character.

I am still proud of our first effort. For this class, I need to take more time honing the script, taking time to get confident and natural seeming acting, and spending more time in the editing booth.


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